in tents

in tents

framework

tells a story

 

unzip

see light

let bugs in

 

conflict

army of ants

praying mantis

 

it rains

tent collapses

ex it

 

follow ants

to the anthill

slide down the pole

 

con tents

improved framework

prefix “con” can have two definitions

 

by mary ann blinkhorn

“I shall be sleeping in five minutes.”

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10 thoughts on “in tents

  1. annotating60 says:

    I can follow the action in the poem, though it is vague as to what your thrust is.>KB

  2. ericmvogt says:

    Is thrust connected to its theme? 😉

    • mypenandme says:

      There’s a lot to be said for not unzipping the tent door first before assembling…where is a story without conflict?…once conflict arrives, is it to save or discard…what will it lead to?…will it affect or replace the original foundation?…shedding light on what is written may show us what is already there or it may unepectedly take us somewhere else…perhaps someone will step on the anthill baracading the entrance…perhaps never unzipping the door to begin with would have allowed XYZ…one has to keep experimenting

  3. mypenandme says:

    edit out the original framework or build upon it–that would be the next decision…

  4. mypenandme says:

    also in tents vs intense sheds a different light of its own

  5. mypenandme says:

    an anthill has an ant hole—do we simply jump right in or slide down the pole safely?

  6. ruskovitch says:

    I have a feeling my in tentz days are over
    LOVe
    r.

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