red bricks falling

follow the errors

the clinks, the claps

the jingles of girls

in spaghetti straps

over to the clothing factories

where well-patterned rats labor

and then go home

up to the mind’s attic

where tongues depress

and ruins rise

purging themselves

of truths and lies

out onto

polished vindicated fields of ideas

raw curtains

hanging in large windows

red bricks falling

by mary ann blinkhorn

written for Three Word Wednesday at:  http://www.threewordwednesday.com/

This week’s words:  error, jingle and vindicate

26 thoughts on “red bricks falling

  1. mimijk says:

    How beautiful…”up to the mind’s attic/where tongues depress/ and ruins rise/purging themselves/of truths and lies” – magnificent!

  2. soumyav says:

    Lovely one.! thanks for my liking my post and having a visit there..

  3. unfetteredbs says:

    “up to the mind’s attic where tongues depress” wow you really nailed the image here… nice!

  4. alexanderpseudonym says:

    When I started reading this I didn’t quite get it, but after re-reading it a few times I actually really like it! It’s got such a rhythm, just ‘following the errors’ until the ‘red bricks start falling’. Brilliant

  5. abdulbencamel says:

    I think this falls into the category of ‘you could sing the phonebook..’ tho of course *your* phonebook has become this mind altering ritual of the science of creative intelligence – whoa

  6. oppression? I have spoke with women who worked in the factories that barely made it worth their while to be there.

    • mypenandme says:

      Mostly my subconscious wrote this poem in one foul swoop, using some notes I’d had penned a bit earlier. Upon analysing it, I see that it touches on many things.

  7. mj says:

    nice! Its refreshing in its thought!

  8. Charley McKelvy says:

    I especially liked “well-patterned rats.” Thank you.

  9. aloha mypenandme – you have a great rhythm and rhyme flow in this. it’s fun to read out loud in my head – even if a little edgy. and then the sudden stop. i like the way your words move the reader. aloha.

  10. ms pie says:

    i love the idea of spaghetti strap sandals clapping… it appeals to the happiness factor…

  11. your blog is very interesting, every post seems like a brand new day! great going!

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