her separate reality

she opens dresser drawer

and finds untapped poem

skeletonized

on bottom liner

immeasurable

unreachable

unlike any other

if only it weren’t so

if only she had

and you hadn’t

 

 

by mary ann blinkhorn

24 thoughts on “her separate reality

  1. boomiebol says:

    Thank you so much for stopping by my blog, and liking one of the posts.

  2. rich says:

    love the unknowns in the poem. we don’t need to know what they “hadn’t.” we only need to know how they feel about it.

    • mypenandme says:

      Thank you, Rich. That means a lot to me. 🙂

      • rich says:

        no problem. i know how important feedback is. your poem isn’t about what they did or didn’t do. it’s about the emotions stemming from it. like i told someone yesterday, you can either write a good poem about sadness. or you can write a great poem about a homeless man sleeping on a park bench on christmas eve.

      • mypenandme says:

        Isn’t that the truth! 🙂

  3. ManicDdaily says:

    Lovely–you are so great at compressing sentiment but keeping poignancy and intensity. Wonderful image. K.

  4. dmarshall58 says:

    I love the mixture of mystery and surprise. You balance particularity (the drawer, the liner) and abstraction (skeletonized, had, hadn’t) so well, and that balance, to me, is what makes this poem so alluring.

  5. booguloo says:

    I believe we are all tempted and envious at one time or another. Nice way to put it in perspective.

  6. paulkingston says:

    A beautiful image that captures, to me anyway, all those long-held regrets for relationships that didn’t survive.

  7. Good use of words. I like how you pulled skelatonized out of the closet. OK drawer in your case “).

  8. free penny press says:

    I am a big fan of compression in poetry. say more with less..
    you nailed it here..the mystery is palpable..
    well done!
    lynne

  9. I love the image of the untapped poem being skeletonized and unreachable. Seems like a metaphor for feelings left unexpressed. Very nice!

  10. jordanclary says:

    I love this poem! Great images.

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